platinumbronze (platinumbronze) wrote in chialpha,
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I'm applying to Liberty University. Can someone read my essay please (It's really short I promise) and give me ANY feedback you feel necessary.

For as long as I can remember my parents had always reminded me that rules are something we strongly believe in, so it’s no surprise that I’ve always thought twice about the decisions I make. It was almost to a point where I was too scared to even consider doing the things I knew I wasn’t supposed to do. Because of this, I always stood out in my group of friends. They were great people and I loved spending time with them but they didn’t always make the best choices and I didn’t always agree with the things they did. It’s not an easy thing to be separated from your friends on that level. I can remember when the only thing I wanted was to be included and I’d always wonder “why can’t I just be like everyone else?” Now I know that times like these are tests. Not everyone knows Jesus Christ, and that’s why I can’t always be like the rest of the world. It’s good to know that even when tests come at my everyday I can get through them all with the help of God, and I’m excited to come to Liberty and be with people who feel the same way as me and trying to make the same decisions and who won’t make me feel like the “left-out” friend when I’m around them.
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